This is my Autumn poem. I loved making this poem because its about Autumn and I love Autumn so much and I loved writing about this. To get my ideas me and my class went outside to see what we could write about for this poem!
Do you like Autumn?
Hi Neave, I love your use of the comma in the sentence "crunchy, crinkly and wet leaves". The picture you have chosen to illustrate your Autumn writing is perfect!
Hi Neave, I love your Autumn poem! Especially since Autumn is my favourite season. I like how you used your senses to describe how autumn feels. Maybe next time you could replace the word "smelled" to smelt. I like your descriptive learning story, it really helps me understand your learning. Keep up the great work! Keeva
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Hi Neave, I love your use of the comma in the sentence "crunchy, crinkly and wet leaves". The picture you have chosen to illustrate your Autumn writing is perfect!
ReplyDeleteHi Neave,
ReplyDeleteI love your Autumn poem!
Especially since Autumn is my favourite season.
I like how you used your senses to describe how autumn feels.
Maybe next time you could replace the word "smelled" to smelt.
I like your descriptive learning story, it really helps me understand your learning.
Keep up the great work!
Keeva